学生姓名：D同学
毕业院校及专业：国内重点大学生物转财务管理专业
申请专业：金融
语言成绩：GPA：90/100；TOEFL：112；GMAT：710
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申请院校录取结果：
1. Johns Hopkins University （录取）
2. Washington University in St. Louis （录取）
3. University of Maryland （录取）
4. University of Connecticut （录取）
5. University of Rochester （等待名单）
6. Brandeis University（等待名单）
7. Fordham University （结果等待中）
在美国院校的众多专业中，金融专业向来都是中国申请者追逐的对象，与此同时，TOP50商学院对于申请者的要求也高，TOEFL:100以上，GMAT:700以上基本上是顶尖商学院对于申请者最基本的要求，商科名校申请的竞争是异常激烈的，那么在申请者同等条件下，文书写作部分就会显得异常重要。D同学硬件条件非常不错，大二就已和澳际签约，从一开始就有了很好的规划，相应地她所有学校也都赶了第一轮申请，抢占了先机。这里需要指出越早申请越好，一定是基于充分的准备之上，不建议在没有准备好的情况下，匆忙赶第一轮申请。对于D同学的文书，我们在着力展现她数理背景强的同时，也在文书中通过学生发起公益性的商业活动非常自然地展示出学生的爱心，公益精神以及领导力。在美国公益组织非常多，美国本身是建立在公民自治的基础之上，而政府的权利相对就小，因此，美国社会非常看重个体的志愿精神，而且商业伦理道德也是商科院校非常看重的，所以笔者认为具有爱心的领导者更具竞争力。
下面笔者针对D同学所选的几个学校文书题目进行解析：
1）Johns Hopkins University：这所学校是中国申请者常申的学校之一，学校文书分为必答题和选答题两部分，必答题部分要求500字；非必答题部分如果选择作答，需要从4个题目中选择其一作答
必答题部分要求申请者写一次自己开创机会，构建一个新的产品或者体系或者你激励他人行动的经历，学校更倾向于看到是申请者的职业经历，学术追求或者是民众参与的活动。对于有工作经验的申请者来讲，无疑我们的首选是从职业经历中去选取素材；对于应届毕业生可以选择学术经历或者专业性的比赛或者活动或者公益性的志愿者活动经历；
而约翰霍普金斯可选择性的问题包括4个话题，分别是三个优点和一个待提高的方面；商业人文关怀；你将来想要解决的商业领域的难题；上传视频；笔者建议如果你在硬件条件方面没有足够的胜出的信心，这里建议选择自己擅长的话题作答。
2）Washington University in St. Louis
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圣路易斯大学录取难度非常大，学校2016年的文书题目和去年有所不同，必答题部分字数由1000字缩至500字，由原来偏学术的目的陈述变为关注于申请者本身的多元化的经历及故事的自我介绍。很显然，学校更希望通过这篇必答文书看到申请者身上独特的闪光点，笔者认为学校更多地是想考量申请者情商高低，更希望看到申请者个性化的经历。对于自选性文书申请者可用于解释GPA低于3.0的情况，有重大疾病影响学业的情况等特殊情况的解释说明。
3）University of Maryland
马里兰大学的文书题目是最常见的长短期的职业目标和职业规划，为什么选择马里兰大学商学院，为什么现在选择读硕士项目？篇幅要求在500字。同时，马里兰大学要求上传网上面试视频，申请者注意自身仪容仪表要整洁大方，熟识简历和个人陈述的内容。
4）University of Connecticut
康涅狄格主文书仍然是最常见的长短期的职业目标，以及康涅狄格的项目如何能够帮你实现这些目标。即你看重学校项目的哪些优势，而补充题目是学校想知道申请者能够为学校带来什么？比如申请者独特的个人经历与文化背景。
5）University of Rochester
罗切斯特也是非常常规的文书题目长短期目标，需要标明想要从事的行业以及一个备选的短期目标，最后，为什么罗切斯特商学院最适合你？第二个题目笔者认为学校想了解学生的个性特点告即诉我们一个关于你的有趣的事实，笔者认为细节的描写胜过宏观概括优秀品质。
6）Brandeis University和Fordham University
这两个学校也都是常规的题目为什么选择该校该专业，学校项目对于申请者的职业发展有什么帮助？自选性文书，申请者可做特殊情况说明。如果其他申请材料中已经展示的内容，在此不必赘述。
总之，商科文书话题包括长短期职业目标，领导经历，失败的经历及教训，道德困境，重要成就，长处与不足，自选性文书，另外大部分商科院校还会经常问到你为什么选择我们的商学院，你觉得我们的项目能在哪些方面帮到你，所以申请者要注意选校，写文书也像谈恋爱一样，两厢情愿才能一拍即合，我们在写自己如何有能力去学习商科研究生项目的同时，也要对每个学校的项目特点和学校所能提供的资源了然于心，这样就可以针对学校陈述自己的优势，让学校觉得你就是我们想要的候选人，我们现有的资源有能力把你培养成优秀的人才。
附：约翰霍普金斯英文文书题目
Compulsory Essay: Please respond to the following question:
Business leaders have the ability to create opportunities, build products and systems, and inspire others to action. Please describe a time you created an opportunity, built a new product or system, or inspired others to act. The example you provide and elaborate upon may come from your professional endeavors, academic pursuits or civic engagements. (500 word maximum)
Optional Essay - Select 1 option from list below:
1). Please describe three of your primary strengths and how those strengths have been put into action for the betterment of the communities or businesses you have served or endeavors you have pursued. Also share one area in need of improvement and the steps you have taken to improve within that area. (250 words maximum)
OR
2). Business with humanity in mind means many things to different people. Please explain what business with humanity in mind means to you and how you will apply your knowledge, skills and abilities to advance this ideal over the next five years. (250 words maximum)
OR
3). Please identify a tough problem that you are committed to addressing as a future business leader. What role will you play in the solution? What skills and abilities do you have (or might you need to acquire) to tackle this task? (250 words maximum)
OR
4). Upload a Word document with a link to a short video you prepared and post for our review. If the video includes audio, the audio file must be in English and must be clear enough to hear easily. The video should be no more than 5 minutes in length and should help the admissions committee learn something more about you. You can feel free to be creative but please use your professional judgment on what material is most appropriate for application to the Johns Hopkins Carey Business School.
附华大圣路易斯英文文书题目
Required Essay
Please respond to both of the following required items in one uploaded document:
1. In one or two sentences, please describe your immediate career plans upon graduation from Olin.
2. At Olin, we pride ourselves on our close-knit community and aim to know every student by name and story. In an essay of no more than 500 words, please introduce yourself as you would to your future Olin classmates.
Optional Essay
Please provide any additional information not previously addressed in other areas of the application that you feel would be helpful to the Admissions Committee in its assessment of your candidacy. (300 word maximum)
附：马里兰文书题目
What are your specific post-degree short-term and long-term goals? Why Smith? Why a masters degree? Why now?
Please limit your response to 500 words.
附：康涅狄格文书题目
Primary Essay
Why are you interested in pursuing your graduate business degree at this stage in your life/career? What are your short-term and long-term career goals and how will this graduate business program help you achieve these goals?
Supplemental Essay
How will you and your experiences and values contribute to our program?
Optional Essay
Please provide any additional information that you would like to present to the admissions committee if you feel it is not appropriately reflected in your application and essays to better represent you.
附：罗切斯特文书题目
Essay 1 (Required): Describe your short-term and long-term goals for post-MBA or post-MS. Given the fluctuation of economic and industry hiring trends, identify a back-up plan should your short-term goal not be immediately attainable. How does your past education and experience support your career objectives? Lastly, what aspects of your intended Simon Business School program make it a good choice for your graduate study? (250-500 word limit)*
Essay 2 (Required for Full-Time MBA/MS Only): In 25 words or less, provide us with an interesting fact about yourself not expressed elsewhere in your application. (25 word limit)
Essay 3 (Optional): Share additional information you think is important in the evaluation of your application, including any concerns you think the Admissions Committee may have regarding your candidacy. (500 word limit)
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